Post by ohgodhelpme on Nov 18, 2015 2:55:36 GMT -5
Welcome to Sins of 6 Catacllysms! I'm basically insulting my own work, looking at it from a distanced perspective and slightly venting my own frustration at all the honest bullshit in this story's universe
H-H-H-Here I go.
>Anything involving magic
I screwed up right there at the first step. I don't care how unique the system actually is, when a story involved complex magic, it's bound to be convoluted. That's sin 1
>Some old guy spent his days fantasizing about having sex with Neptune until he ended up absorbing its power and becoming the first to discover the Marluxian Arts
Yeah, I know. Hyperbole. But I can't even believe the guy did that. I mean, what jerk dedicates the last year of his life to a ball of gas in space? It's because of this dick and his weird obsessions with planets that millions of people would die in the future. Sin 2
>200 year war over which planet is better
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. Sin 3.
>Kings back in this era were succeeded by means of patricide. In an era defined by war, the son of a king surpassing his father in combat was symbolic of the planetary god they worshipped manifesting in them
You know what? Nothing against this aspect. I actually quite like this.
>Agzabah is a god but really isn't a god
Don't we all wish the story would just make up its mind? It leads you to believe one thing, the.n reveals something contradicting to it. And then what do you know? The reader is bombarded with another history lesson in the messed up world of Dharja's Era. Great going there, me. Sin 4
>Everything in the story is literally answered with magic
How can the Phoenix Demons, Phaedra, Von, and Iris live for centuries? Because magic. How can Luxaura formulate a plan to cease the flow of energy in the world and destroy all the planets and magic along with them? Magic. How can Roy die and then revive himself by having Nadena kill their daughter as s sacrifice? Magic. And because Roy is a dick. Sin 6
>Vevoskovians marrying and mixing with Syvians
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. Disgusting. Sin 7
>Daijin Aiwa Yozuruu is literally NotPleasueSquad.
What was I thinking. The idea is still sexy though. Plus they're complete badasses. It's still a dirty, dirty sin. SIN 8
>Hero was lied to by someone he trusted his whole life and figures out his death will literally save the world
Cliche. I love the despair and shock that comes with that moment, but it's still a cliche. Sin 9
>Vera isn't the main character and suffers an awful fate
I need to go to church for this one and pray God won't smite my heathen soul. Sin 10
>Explicit mass murdering of blacks, cripples, and transsexuals as they were deemed unfit during the Planetary Wars
I really do worry about this. It's like Hitler's wet dream. Hope it doesn't alienate the readers, especially since Dharja ends up being right about a lot of things. Sin 11.
>The Diadara Clan is the most pathetic clan ever
I mean seriously. They couldn't have their way so they nearly took down all of Omni in their little civil war. But then Roy, who is a Diadara, is one of the most selfless characters. I guess might and privilege are hereditary, but being a dick isn't. Oh wait.... SIN 12
>Hita has red hair
Someone get this hothead outta here. Sin 13
>The entirety of the Post-Imperial Era
It's all sorts of messed up. Hunger, disease, child soldiers, Providence Disaster and Sex Trade, and the era where people mostly married 13-15 year old girls. I mean, it kind of makes sense considering the circumstances of the era, but look me in the eye and tell me the thought of a pregnant 15 year old doesn't bother you. That's just wrong, man. Sin 14. Just like those girls.
>Dharja being revived
I love this but I can see why others wouldn't. The man builds a crypt for his mother on Callisto, one of Jupiter's moons, then he spent 100 years working on the perfect Pluto Surrogate to guard the crypt, then he up and dies because his daughter is a greedy cunt, then he meets Von and passes on his power and consciousness to him, does the same to Phaedra, has the Pluto surrogate aid them, orchestrated the killing of hundreds of millions of people, and then instructs Von and Phaedra to travel to Callisto and break open the crypt, where his selfish daughter ended up burying him along with his mother after she killed him, they take his perfect condition corpse, put his soul back into his body once the planets align, and BAM. you got yourself the most convoluted revival plot in history. Sin 15
Yikes. I gotta go to bed.
H-H-H-Here I go.
>Anything involving magic
I screwed up right there at the first step. I don't care how unique the system actually is, when a story involved complex magic, it's bound to be convoluted. That's sin 1
>Some old guy spent his days fantasizing about having sex with Neptune until he ended up absorbing its power and becoming the first to discover the Marluxian Arts
Yeah, I know. Hyperbole. But I can't even believe the guy did that. I mean, what jerk dedicates the last year of his life to a ball of gas in space? It's because of this dick and his weird obsessions with planets that millions of people would die in the future. Sin 2
>200 year war over which planet is better
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. Sin 3.
>Kings back in this era were succeeded by means of patricide. In an era defined by war, the son of a king surpassing his father in combat was symbolic of the planetary god they worshipped manifesting in them
You know what? Nothing against this aspect. I actually quite like this.
>Agzabah is a god but really isn't a god
Don't we all wish the story would just make up its mind? It leads you to believe one thing, the.n reveals something contradicting to it. And then what do you know? The reader is bombarded with another history lesson in the messed up world of Dharja's Era. Great going there, me. Sin 4
>Everything in the story is literally answered with magic
How can the Phoenix Demons, Phaedra, Von, and Iris live for centuries? Because magic. How can Luxaura formulate a plan to cease the flow of energy in the world and destroy all the planets and magic along with them? Magic. How can Roy die and then revive himself by having Nadena kill their daughter as s sacrifice? Magic. And because Roy is a dick. Sin 6
>Vevoskovians marrying and mixing with Syvians
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. Disgusting. Sin 7
>Daijin Aiwa Yozuruu is literally NotPleasueSquad.
What was I thinking. The idea is still sexy though. Plus they're complete badasses. It's still a dirty, dirty sin. SIN 8
>Hero was lied to by someone he trusted his whole life and figures out his death will literally save the world
Cliche. I love the despair and shock that comes with that moment, but it's still a cliche. Sin 9
>Vera isn't the main character and suffers an awful fate
I need to go to church for this one and pray God won't smite my heathen soul. Sin 10
>Explicit mass murdering of blacks, cripples, and transsexuals as they were deemed unfit during the Planetary Wars
I really do worry about this. It's like Hitler's wet dream. Hope it doesn't alienate the readers, especially since Dharja ends up being right about a lot of things. Sin 11.
>The Diadara Clan is the most pathetic clan ever
I mean seriously. They couldn't have their way so they nearly took down all of Omni in their little civil war. But then Roy, who is a Diadara, is one of the most selfless characters. I guess might and privilege are hereditary, but being a dick isn't. Oh wait.... SIN 12
>Hita has red hair
Someone get this hothead outta here. Sin 13
>The entirety of the Post-Imperial Era
It's all sorts of messed up. Hunger, disease, child soldiers, Providence Disaster and Sex Trade, and the era where people mostly married 13-15 year old girls. I mean, it kind of makes sense considering the circumstances of the era, but look me in the eye and tell me the thought of a pregnant 15 year old doesn't bother you. That's just wrong, man. Sin 14. Just like those girls.
>Dharja being revived
I love this but I can see why others wouldn't. The man builds a crypt for his mother on Callisto, one of Jupiter's moons, then he spent 100 years working on the perfect Pluto Surrogate to guard the crypt, then he up and dies because his daughter is a greedy cunt, then he meets Von and passes on his power and consciousness to him, does the same to Phaedra, has the Pluto surrogate aid them, orchestrated the killing of hundreds of millions of people, and then instructs Von and Phaedra to travel to Callisto and break open the crypt, where his selfish daughter ended up burying him along with his mother after she killed him, they take his perfect condition corpse, put his soul back into his body once the planets align, and BAM. you got yourself the most convoluted revival plot in history. Sin 15
Yikes. I gotta go to bed.